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IELTS Writing (General) Task 2 Sample 2


Despite our tall claims around development, we have far to go in terms of reusing and recycling. Elucidate in an essay format with at least 250 words.

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Sample Answer

Human beings have come a long way in terms of development. Considering thematically, the journey began with the era of survival-linked development, times when the basic tools were invented and society was engaged in building basic resources to make life secure and cover bare necessities. Thereafter came needs-based development, when gradually machines came into picture to cater to the needs of an ever-growing population across cultures. The famous industrial revolution changed the dynamics of society and human lives in general, and then came the consumerism driven development of today, when despite the markets being flooded with goods, ‘more’ still remains inadequate. And since the manifestation has now imbibed innumerable flaws, development as a concept needs a serious change of attitude before it is late, and before it has sunken the entire civilization into an irrecoverable abyss. The realisation that near extinction is looming has made countries across the world make a gradual turn towards sustainable development, aiming to preserve the spirit of the earth for the future while taking care of the present.

A lot of the blame is directed towards science being responsible for the current state of affairs. However, there is a conscious shift in the role of scientific research and inventions in the direction of sustainable development. Research in the direction of green energy and green transportation, urban designing that incorporates modern living without damaging the ecosystem, organic farming, technological reforms in the manufacturing sectors, and conservation efforts to restore biological life are some of the remarkable measures taken up by major countries to combat the damages done through centuries of abuse under the garb of development. Several multinational companies having recognised this are re-engineering their processes and re-designing products that are sourced and manufactured responsibly while recycling is slowly but surely becoming a formidable industry for better.

Along with this shift in focus, we also have to make a complete change in our outlook towards our ways of life and embrace a more nurturing attitude to our environment at the individual level. Simple steps such as reducing our consumption levels, reducing wastes, and reusing goods as much as possible can go a long way. There must be far greater awareness regarding recycling and waste management at all levels and practical solutions should be adapted across homes, schools and colleges, and offices to make long term impact.

There are global forums and clusters of nations meeting on climate talks, energy meets, ocean dumping issues etc and several treaties get signed regularly. But for conspicuous change to happen on the ground, people, nations and technology have to come together and practically implement measures rather than sit through paper deals. Actionable measures could include policy shifts at a government level, to offering financial benefits to industries and consumers of ecologically responsible products, to banning harmful production and waste disposal methods to name a few. The volume of waste generated by the world even today that are disposed untreated are a glaring testimony of human failure that endangers all forms of life and disrupts ecological balance. And the deadline has already passed.

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Analysis

Coherence and Cohesion

  • The approach taken by this candidate is considerably hyperbolic (exaggerated, in literary terms) from the start. Be careful not to waste time in your answer with this sort of approach, as it may lead to you running out of time to get your point across (which will lead to you being marked down). In this example above, the closing sentence of paragraph one could have easily opened the answer, continuing from there. That being said, the opening paragraph certainly conveys the candidate’s emotional investment in the topic, which isn’t all bad.

  • The candidate then moves on to outline in a coherent manner the technology (paragraph two), education and awareness (paragraph three), and the potential for policy changes (paragraph four).

  • The closing sentence, in opening with ‘And’, is certainly an informal approach. While it is grammatically incorrect, it has become acceptable in less formal writing, particularly in literary fiction.

Grammar

  • needs-based development - note how the hyphen links the words preceding ‘development’, indicating that the development is ‘based upon’ our ‘needs’. Visit How to Use the Dash and Hyphen for more.

Lexical Resource

  • conspicuous - something that is clear or evident, not hidden. For example, a person wearing bright clothes is very conspicuous.

  • actionable - items upon which actions should be taken, or something indicating or facilitating a call to action.


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