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IELTS Writing (Academic) Task 1 Sample 5


The Food Chain

Diagram 1 shows a food web containing eight food chains that are marked numerically, i.e. each number indicates a food chain involving the primary producer up to the apex consumer. Refer to Diagram 2 for the categories of consumers in a food chain presented hierarchically. Describe the food web through these links, drawing examples from your natural environment, in at least 150 words.

Use the following additional information if necessary:

  • Primary producers (plants) occupy the bottom level in a food chain/food web;

  • Apex consumers (hawk in Diagram 1) occupy the top level.

Diagram - 1

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Diagram - 2

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Sample Answer

Our natural environment comprises several ecosystems, and food chains are crucial to sustain them. Diagram 1 depicts a food web with eight small food chains found very close to human habitation. The hawk is at the top of the web as an apex consumer while the plants, primary producers, are at the bottom.

In the first chain, the plants are eaten by the rabbits who are hunted by the hawk. Likewise, there are mice and seed-eating birds that are dependent on plants for survival and are consumed by the hawk, shown in the second and fourth chain. The mice also contribute to the third food chain where they are eaten by the snakes as secondary consumers, who in turn become a meal for the hawk at the apex.

In the fifth, sixth, seventh and the eighth chain, the grass hopper is at the primary consumer level. It is directly fed by the hawk in the fifth food chain. In the sixth, the frog as secondary consumer feeds on it, followed by the snake at the tertiary level and the chain thereafter ends with the hawk. The grasshopper is eaten by other insects in the seventh chain. These insects are consumed at the tertiary level by insect-eating birds that sustain the hawk.

The eighth food chain has the highest number of links and includes all the hierarchical consumers listed in Diagram 2. It bifurcates from the level of the insects as secondary consumers, and has the frog as the tertiary, the snake as the quaternary and finally the hawk as the apex consumer. The food web reveals how damaging a single link can result in widespread imbalance in nature.

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Analysis

COHERENCE AND COHESION

  • This candidate opted for an introductory sentence defined by their own observations about the natural environment and the significance of the information above. This is a strong start, displaying a practical understanding of the data at hand.

  • The candidate recognises the dependent relationships between the producers and consumers, and their writing style maintains a sense of cohesion throughout. Separate or ‘staccato’ sentences would not capture this sense of dependency in the same manner.

  • The closing paragraph opens by linking both diagrams, a clever way of connecting and summarizing all the given information. The vocabulary related to hierarchy is also successfully incorporated, displaying an ability to use the terminology provided.

GRAMMAR

  • Note that the tense used throughout is Present Simple. This is the most common tense used for such things as news reports, informal storytelling, and observational humour. Using the Present Simple (or Simple Present) makes things imminent and relevant to the present moment, creating a sense of connection.

LEXICAL RESOURCE

habitation - the state of living, or the place occupied by (in this context) humans.

comprises - meaning ‘is composed/made (up) of’. Sometimes wrongly used with the preposition ‘of’ (i.e. ‘comprises of’), thought to be a misunderstanding drawn from ‘comprised of’.

bifurcate(s) - divides or splits in two. Excellent word choice.

can result in - a more concise way to make this point in the closing sentence would be ‘can cause’. Another alternative could be ‘can lead to’.


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