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This chart gives information about the number of people who play video games on a computer or device. Summarise the information by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons. (Around 150 words)
This chart gives information about the number of adults who say they often or sometimes play video games on a computer, TV, game console, or portable device.
Young men between the ages of 18 and 29 dominate the figures for those who most play games. 40% of women admit playing games often or sometimes, while for men, the figure rises to include almost half of the male population.
A similar gap in usage can be seen between ethnic groups with game-playing proving more popular with Hispanic players (at 48%) than with white populations (41%).
The biggest disparity in numbers is apparent in different age groups. Just over 10% of 65-year-olds and above say they play games often; while 60% of those in the 18 to 29 age group enjoy video games often or sometimes. This illustrates a huge disparity between different generations.
Education also seems to be a factor in video game use, with just 36% of those educated to a degree level playing games, compared to 50% of those with just some college education.
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This candidate has employed a relatively sophisticated vocabulary (although see notes on ‘admit’ and ‘dominate’). You should take every opportunity to use synonyms considered less commonplace (within reason), as this suits the tone of academic work.